“Silence” all I could hear were the slow foot steps of mum and dad
The roots and ferns tickled my toes as we walked across the old log that sat about eleven metres across the rapids. As the sun was slowly drifting down we approached the lagoon. “Here it is!” mum said. it was a big hole in the ground encased in a cave. The water was blue and as clear as the sky, it was the most phenomenal thing I had ever seen. We all had a swim and relaxed there for the rest of the night…
Hello Lochlan,
Your use of descriptive language to enhance the experience for your readers shows you understand the importance of catching their attention.
“roots and ferns tickled my toes” “the sun slowly drifting down” “the water was blue and as clear as the sky”
Keep developing and sharing your growing skills.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia